Backstory Hazard

When I did my final edit of The Darcys of Pemberley, I ran into a thorny issue all novelists have to address: how to handle backstory, the events that are supposed to have taken place before the action of the novel begins. The reader needs a certain amount for the story to make sense.  Determining when, how, and how much to supply is the tricky part.

How did Jane Austen deal with it?  She took a very straight-forward approach.  In five of her six novels, she served up a heaping helping of backstory narrative (at least a couple of pages of it) right at the beginning.  It makes sense; those events happened first chronologically and have a bearing on what follows.  In Mansfield Park, she starts her account a full three decades before the heroine, Fanny Price, arrives on the scene.

About thirty years ago, Miss Maria Ward of Huntingdon, with only seven thousand pounds, had the good luck to captivate Sir Thomas Bertram, of Mansfield Park, in the county of Northampton, and to be thereby raised to the rank of baronet’s lady, with all the comforts and consequences of an hansome house and large income.  All Huntingdon exclaimed on the greatness of the match, and her uncle, the lawyer, himself, allowed her to be at least three thousand pounds short of any equitable claim to it. (Mansfield Park, opening lines, chapter 1)

Austen goes on to tell us about the circumstances of Lady Bertram’s two sisters and how past events have brought things to the current state of affairs.  This is a simple, logical, and pragmatic way of dispensing backstory information.  Unfortunately for the modern writer, it’s no longer in vogue.  Pride and Prejudice is completely different, however, and a much better example of what is expected nowadays.  After the famous opening two lines, which set the theme and tone, we go straight into the action – a feisty conversation between Mr. and Mrs. Bennet.  So what happened to the backstory?  There’s less of it, and it’s doled out more gracefully, in small doses along the way as needed.

If the story absolutely requires a lot of set-up, the author had better make it entertaining, which reminds me of something I read in Save the Cat, Blake Snyder’s book on screenwritingHe describes a useful device he calls “The Pope in the Pool,” a trick to make the delivery of necessary exposition more interesting.  The idea is that if you put the Pope in a swimming pool (or some other such unlikely scene) the audience will be so distracted by it that they won’t notice they are simultaneously being fed lots of necessary background information that would otherwise be boring.

So, how did I deal with the backstory issue for The Darcys of Pemberley?  I set out with the intention of making the novel stand on its own, to include enough background material so that people who weren’t familiar with Pride and Prejudice would still be able to follow and enjoy it.  That meant providing a LOT of backstory.  I put it in.  Then, with each rewrite, I took more and more of it out again until there’s barely a trace left, most of it in the brief prologue. 

Why did I ax it?  Well, I’d be cruising along through the story like I was rolling down a freshly paved highway in a big yellow convertible on a sunny day.  Then, suddenly, CLUNK.  I’d hit an unexpected chunk of backstory.  It brought the action to a screeching halt just as surely as a tire flattened by dangerous road debris.  It had to go.

So, be forewarned.  The Darcys of Pemberley is a direct and deliberate sequel; there’s no reason to pretend it’s anything else.  If you want to read it when it comes out in a month or two (and, naturally, I hope you will), start reading Pride and Prejudice now!  Additionally, or as a viable alternative, I recommend watching the ’95 BBC film adaptation starring Colin Firth.  That’s the most enjoyable way to collect all the backstory you’ll need.

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Blank Canvas

I wish I had written down a great quote someone posted on Twitter the other day.  It went something like this: What a blank canvas is to the artist and empty paper is to the writer, silence is to the musician.  Since my creative interests carry me into the realms of art and music as well as writing, I’ve faced all three – most recently, the blank canvas.

This morning I started the painting that I hope will turn into the cover art for The Darcys of Pemberley.  As I mentioned before (see Pemberley, the Picturesque), it will be loosely based on a view of Lyme House from the ’95 BBC production of Pride and Prejudice.  Here’s the work-in-progress.

It has a long way to go.  The house looks a little cold and lonely right now. I need to warm up the color, get the water looking like water, and do the entire foreground. But at least all that white canvas is gone.  So, I’ve made it over the first hurdle.

It’s the same for writing and singing; the hardest part is getting started. Staring at that ream of blank paper (or computer screen) is intimidating. Venturing out into an empty, expectant silence can be scary.  That sensible, timid voice in my head tells me, “It’s too risky. Safer not to try. Public humiliation awaits.”  Right now, for instance, I’m guessing you’re not all that impressed with my artistic abilities (and I’m not all that confident in them either, to tell you the truth). 

So, why do people keep painting, writing, and making music? Not for any tangible reward; most artists/writers/musicians will never see big fame or fortune. I think we’re simply compelled to fill the void. We can’t NOT do it.  Seen in proper perspective, those blank canvases, empty pages, and vacant silences are not foreboding.  Each one is an open invitation that’s too good to bypass, an irresistible opportunity to share a creative vision with others, the chance to make daily life a little richer.

I would rarely agree with Mrs. Elton, but she makes a good point here (which applies to all the arts, not only music):  “I honestly said that…the world was not necessary to me…Certainly I had been accustomed to every luxury at Maple Grove; but I did assure him that two carriages were not necessary to my happiness, nor were spacious apartments. ‘But,’ said I, ‘I do not think I can live without something of a musical society. I condition for nothing else; but without music, life would be a blank to me.'”   (Emma, chapter 32)

Blank: Not marked; lacking features or interest; uneventful or unproductive; emptiness of mind.  Now, we can’t have that, can we?

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Playing Mind Games

Maybe you’ve seen this circulating on Facebook:

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I’ve seen this before, and I am totally fascinated by it.  So I decided to test the theory on my readers.  I’ve taken a paragraph from Jane Austen’s Pride and Prejudice (it’s chapter 61, but no fair peeking) and mixed up the letters for you according to the Cambridge criteria (although I think they only stirred whereas I thoroughly scrambled them).  See if you can read it as well as the paragraph above, and leave me a comment – preferably scrambled!  It’s hard for me to judge for myself if it’s working, since I already know what it says.

HPAPY FOR ALL HER MERNATAL FLINGEES WAS THE DAY ON WCIHH MRS BNENET GOT RID OF HER TWO MSOT DIVERSNEG DETRGAUHS.   WTIH WAHT DIGTELEHD PIDRE SHE ARTEWADRFS VETISID MRS BILGENY AND TEKALD OF MRS DRACY MAY BE GSUSEED.  I WSIH I CLOUD SAY, FOR THE SKAE OF HER FILMAY, TAHT THE ACMNEPSHLICOMT OF HER ENREAST DREISE IN THE EMBNESSTABLIHT  OF SO MNAY OF HER CLIDERHN, PRUCDOED SO HPAPY AN ECEFFT AS TO MKAE HER A SLEBINSE, ABLIMAE, WLEL-IMFOREND WAMON FOR THE RSET OF HER LFIE; THUGOH PAHPERS IT WAS LKUCY FOR HER HANBSUD, WHO MGIHT NOT HVAE RISHEELD DEIMOTSC FITCILEY IN SO USUNAUL A FROM, TAHT SHE SILTL WAS OCSNALOLAICY NOURVES AND IVABLAIRNY SLILY.

This whole idea kind of shoots down the importance of spelling correctly, doesn’t it?  PS -My laptop nearly had a melt down when I hit spell check for this post. 😉 Tee hee.

Conjectures as to the meaning of it, rapid and wild, hurried into her brain; but she was satisfied with none.  (Pride and Prejudice, chapter 51)

PS – For another example of this sort of thing, please see More Mind Games.

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When Honesty is Not the Best Policy

How honest are you?  In your personal code of conduct, is it okay to dodge a question that you don’t want to answer? shade the truth for a good cause? omit certain details to save yourself or another person embarrassment?  I think most people believe being less than totally truthful is sometimes justifiable.  And even when we are completely honest, we run the risk of a misunderstanding.  Communication is a risky business, an inexact science.

Seldom, very seldom, does complete truth belong to any human disclosure; seldom can it happen that something is not a little disguised, or a little mistaken …  (Emma, chapter 49)

In real life, secrets, lies, and misunderstandings create havoc.  But when writing fiction, they are our bread and butter, supplying an indispensable source of juicy conflict.  It’s certainly true of my own writing, and of Jane Austen’s as well.  Elizabeth misinterprets Darcy’s reserve as snobbery (Pride and Prejudice). Edward cannot openly declare his love for Elinor because he’s secretly bound by honor to Lucy (Sense and Sensibility).

In The Darcys of Pemberley, I force Elizabeth into a tight spot where, to protect Georgiana, she has to go against her own better judgement:  Elizabeth was left to answer him with whatever resources of creativity she could muster, since the benefit of simple honesty was denied her.  She returned to her husband without delay, prepared to offer a report that contained as much truth but as few of the actual facts as possible.  As you might guess, this concealment later comes back to bite her.

For the sake of the story, a little subterfuge between characters may be necessary – and great fun!  Don’t hesitate to keep the reader somewhat in the dark as well.

This morning I was reviewing a children’s story submitted by a gal in my critique group.  In it, she explained that the voice the great king heard, threatening him, came to his ear by evil magic.  My suggestion to the author was that she had “shown” the readers enough, and shouldn’t “tell” them the rest (“show, don’t tell”).  Kids are smart; let them figure it out.  Allow the readers to interpret the clues you leave and discover the truth for themselves, which is so much more satisfying.

So, when is honesty not the best policy?  In fiction!  After all, fiction is … writings that tell about imaginary people and happenings, what is  imagined or made up.  No one should be expecting the truth, right?

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Pemberley, the Picturesque

Lyme HouseI’m something of an artist, and although writing consumes most of my creative energy, I still pick up a paintbrush from time to time.  So, now that it’s time to produce some cover art for The Darcys of Pemberley, I’m going to try to do it myself.  I’m not a master by any stretch of the imagination, but I probably know a little more about art than Catherine Morland:
 
The Tilneys were soon engaged in another (subject) on which she had nothing to say.  They were viewing the country with the eyes of persons accustomed to drawing, and decided on its capability of being formed into pictures, with all the eagerness of real taste.   Here Catherine was quite lost.  She knew nothing of drawing… The little which she could understand, however, appeared to contradict the very few notions she had entertained on the matter before.  It seemed as if a good view were no longer to be taken from the top of a high hill, and that a clear blue sky was no longer a proof of a fine day.  She was heartily ashamed of her ignorance.  (Northanger Abbey)
 
I just love Jane Austen’s dry humor here, as she pokes fun at the picturesque, the new aesthetic sensibility introduced into English culture in 1782 by William Gilpin. 
 
Anyway, I plan to base my cover art painting on a view of Lyme Park (such as the one above), which serves as Pemberley in the ’95 film adaptation of Pride and Prejudice.  Seeing the house for the first time, Elizabeth Bennet says, “I don’t think I’ve ever seen a place so happily situated.  I like it very well indeed.” 
 
And so do I.  Gilpin might not agree, but I find it quite picturesque.
 
 
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Whose Mother Is She?

 

With it being Mother’s Day, I started thinking about the mothers portrayed in Jane Austen’s novels: Mrs. Bennet, Mrs. Morland, Mrs. Dashwood, and Mrs. Price.  Not exactly an exemplary group, but at least they lived to see their children to adulthood.  Two others did not.  We know almost nothing about Emma Woodhouse’s mother, who is only said to have died too long ago for her to have more than an indistinct remembrance of her caresses.   There’s more information given about Anne Elliot’s deceased mother, Lady Elliot, and her surrogate, Lady Russell

You’ve read Jane Austen.  How well do you know her characters?  Can you recognize the six ladies named above from their descriptions and their words?  Take the quiz below.  (To make it a bit more challenging, I’ve added a lady of my own creation: Mrs. Walker, mother of the heroine of For Myself Alone.)

1) … an excellent woman, sensible and amiable; whose judgement and conduct, if thy might be pardoned the youthful infatuation that made her (Mrs. So-and-so), had never required indulgence afterwards. She had humoured, or softened, or concealed his failings, and promoted his real respectability…

2) … a woman of useful plain sense, with a good temper, and what is more remarkable with a good constitution … (She) did not insist on her daughters being accomplished … (She) was a very good woman, and wished to see her children every thing they ought to be.  “Well, we must live and learn; and the next new friends you make I hope will be better worth keeping.”

3) She was a woman of mean understanding, little information, and uncertain temper.  When she was discontented she fancied herself nervous.  The solace (of her life) was visiting and news. “My dear, you flatter me.  I certainly have had my share of beauty, but I do not pretend to be anything extraordinary now.”

4) an eagerness of mind …which must generally have led to imprudence; she had yet to learn how to govern her feelings; strikingly like her daughter, she was everything good except prudent.  “It is yet too early in life to despair of such an happiness. Why should you be less fortunate than your mother? in one circumstance only… may your destiny be different from hers!”

5) She was a woman rather of sound than of quick abilities … with a delicate sense of honour … a benevolent, charitable, good woman, and capable of strong attachments; most correct in her conduct, strict in her notions of decorum, and with manners that were held a standard of good-breeding.  “Upon my word…I should not have supposed that my opinion of any one could have admitted to such difference of conjecture…”

6) … being out in company was one of the chief pleasures of her life … an excellent mother … neither troubled by disappointed past expectations nor misgivings for the future.  “Men are generally hopeless when it comes to such things in any case.  I depend entirely on you for a full account.”

7) (she) could no longer afford to cherish pride or resentment … eager to regain the friends she had so carelessly sacrificed… Her heart and her time were already quite full; she had neither leisure nor affection to bestow …Her disposition was naturally easy and indolent … “I do not think I am so difficult a mistress to please – and I am sure the place is easy enough, for there is always a girl under her, and I often do half the work myself.”

Have do have it figured out?  Check under “comments” for the answers and reward yourself with chocolate if you got them all correct … or even if you didn’t.

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Kindle-ing

So I got my Kindle in the mail the other day and immediately set about learning how to use it.  I figured out how change the font size and orientation, how to access the pre-loaded dictionaries, and how to make it talk to me in a male or female voice.  I even managed to set up an account at Amazon and get my first book (a collection of the complete works of Jane Austen, naturally) sent directly to the Kindle over wireless internet service.  It wasn’t that hard, but I was still slightly impressed with myself.  And it reminded me of an old blog post I’d written a couple of years back:

We’ve all heard the saying, “You can’t teach an old dog new tricks.” Baloney! Although I may not be exactly old, I’m undeniably middle-aged. And I think I’ve learned more in the last few years than during almost any other period of my life. For example, I’ve learned a tremendous amount about the art of writing – something I had no formal training in before. I’ve discovered what’s involved in trying to get a book published (agents, editors, query letters, literary conferences, etc.). I decided to study Italian after a recent trip to Venice. Perhaps most challenging of all, however, I’ve tackled some of the mysteries of the electronic age: mastering e-mail and my laptop, starting a blog, and constructing a soon-to-be-launched website. Those of us who didn’t grow up with these technologies are at a distinct disadvantage, I admit. But with enough time, determination, and a little patience from the younger generation, we can march into the 21st century with our heads held high (which is much more dignified than being dragged, kicking and screaming, after all). “Is it worth the extra trouble and effort?” you may ask. Yes, it’s exciting to learn new things and, even if nothing else comes of it, we’re keeping brain cells alive! That’s pretty important for old dogs.

Since then, of course, the learning curve has only gotten steeper.  I will soon be finding out how to format a novel (The Darcys of Pemberley) for Kindle and for print-on-demand, not to mention producing cover art for the same!  When I’m feeling a little lazy, I wish I could just let somebody else do all that technical stuff for me.  But what would Jane Austen say to you about me then?  Hmm.  Probably something like this:

“…pity Shannon’s deficiency.  And remember that, if you are ever so forward and clever yourselves, you should always be modest; for, much as you know already, there is a great deal more for you to learn.”  “Yes, I know there is … But I must tell you another thing about Shannon, so odd and so stupid.  Do you know, she says she does not want to learn either Kindle formatting or cover art production!”  “To be sure, my dear, that is very stupid indeed, and shows a great want of genius …” (paraphrased from Mansfield Park, chapter 2)

There we have it.  You are to pity my deficiency.  Meanwhile, I will forge ahead, striving to prove myself not totally wanting in genius.

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Is it a Sign?

Montage Of Numerous Traffic Control Signs

Question: Should I a) publish independently now? -or- b) continue holding out hope for a traditional publishing contract? That’s the decision I’ve been wrestling with, unsure which way I should go. 

I’ve been writing seriously for about six years now.  During that time, I’ve completed three novels and a handful of short stories – none of which are yet published (although at least two of the short stories soon will be).  Despite that fact, there’s no way I’m giving up.  I believe in what I’m doing, and I’ve had enough small successes along the way to keep me not just going forward, but excited.

With the economic downturn and the rise of new technologies, however, the publishing industry has changed forever in that same six years.  The bad news: it’s harder than ever before for an unproven author to get published via the traditional model.  The good news: traditional publishing is no longer the only game in town.  With the various forms of e-publishing and print-on-demand, barriers have come tumbling down.  Many authors are choosing to bypass the whole agent/publisher/bookstore gauntlet and go independent. But is that the right pathway for me?  What do you think? I depend on your opinion.

And you say,Not for the world…would I advise you either way.  You must be the best judge of your own happiness.”  If that’s the way you’re going to be… “as you will not give me your opinion, I must do as well as I can by myself; and I have now quite determined, and really almost made up my mind to…”  (Emma, chapter 7)

I had nearly decided for myself which way to go, but I needed one more little push.  And I got it: another agent rejection.  A sign, perhaps, that the traditional publishing thing is not happening for me, at least not right now. 

So it’s full speed ahead on the road to independent publishing!  I finished my final edit of The Darcys of Pemberley, which now goes to a couple skilled and trusted friends for proof reading.  While they’re doing that, I’m going to try to figure out how to put together some eye-catching cover art, and how to format the book for Kindle (with a print-on-demand hard copy to follow). 

It’s trilling to think that, after so much time and effort, I could be sending one of my “babies”, my first-born, out to meet the world in only a few weeks!  If it’s a great success, I’ll have to write that agent a thank-you note for sending me the right sign.

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Segue to the Twentieth Century

I’m half-heartedly watching the Mariners game (not a good night for them), and wondering how to make a graceful segue from Jane Austen, my usual subject matter, to baseball. No problem. 
 
And it was not very wonderful that Catherine, who had by nature nothing heroic about her, should prefer cricket, base ball, riding on horseback and running about the country at the age of fourteen, to books – or at least books of information – for, provided that nothing like useful knowledge could be gained from them, provided they were all story and no reflection, she had never any objection to books at all. (Northanger Abbey, chapter 1)
 
So now that you know Jane Austen was down with baseball, you won’t think it such a strange departure that I wrote a novel whose protagonist is a minor league baseball player. (To learn more, go to the page for First of Second Chances.) I thought a story set in my own century and in my own country would be easier to write than one in Regency England. It’s a world I already know, so less research. Right?  Not really. 
 
The majority of the story takes place from 1991 – 1993. Recent history, but much has changed even since then, especially in the realm of technology.  “Give that girl a cell phone!” suggested one of my critique partners at one point. But, wait. Did people carry cell phones in 1991? No. And no laptops, CDs, DVDs or Internet either.
 
Next issue: I’d never written a male protagonist before. Fortunately, I’d lived with three men – one husband and two sons – so I had some working knowledge of how they operate and, when in doubt, I could ask them questions.
 
Finally, the baseball issue.  Even though the story wasn’t “about” baseball per se, I still wanted to get that part right, or at least avoid making any glaring errors that would detract from the story for people who understood that world better than I did.  I soon discovered that there were plenty of sources for major league stars and stats, but much less available about the minor leagues, especially behind the scenes stuff. 
 
What I learned through researching this book is that people are the best resources a writer can have. If I didn’t have an answer, it often only took a phone call to someone who did.  When I explained what I needed, most people were interested, generous, and glad to help. My best source turned out to be a minor league ball player whom I found through a blog search.  The blog itself contained a wealth of the kind of information I was looking for. Then, since he invited e-mail questions, I asked for more help and got it! The bonus was that his girlfriend worked in sports medicine, and she volunteered her expertise as well. (Thanks Chris and Juliet!)
 
Jane Austen wrote about her own time, place, and society, so she probably didn’t face the challenge of research. And then there’s the standard advice to “write what you know.” But if I’d done that, I would have missed out on a lot of interesting information and nice people.    
 
 
 
 
 
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Small Successes & Short Stories

“The longest journey begins with a single step.” No, that’s not a Jane Austen quote.  But it came to mind when I thought about announcing a small triumph on my road to writing success.  *trumpet fanfare* Both the stories I submitted to the “Bad Austen” short story contest (for parodies related to Jane Austen’s work) have been accepted for publication!  *more trumpet fanfare*  It’s not the most prestigious honor in the writing world, but it’s a baby step in the right direction – maybe two baby steps, since there are two stories.

So by November, if not before, Shannon Winslow will have her name in print at last!  The world will read how Miss Dashwood Gets Down and Dirty to tackle her rival in the arena of romance, and discover the secret origins of a super hero in Woman of Wonder.

I’m sure Jane Austen was a quicker study, but it’s supposed to take most authors something like 500,000 words (the length of 5 average novels) before they really get a handle on how to write.  If that counts all the stuff you edit out and throw away, I past that point long ago.  Even if it means finished work, I’m well on my way – 3 completed novels plus a growing collection of short stories.

The quote below (from chapter 28 of Pride and Prejudice) speaks of a carriage trip to Hunsford Elizabeth Bennet undertook to visit her friend Charlotte Collins, and another she planned to make later with her Aunt and Uncle Gardiner. 

Every object in the next day’s journey was new and interesting to Elizabeth; and her spirits were in a state for enjoyment; for she had seen her sister looking so well as to banish all fear for her health, and the prospect of her northern tour was a constant source of delight. 

I chose this quote for today because it reminds me that half the pleasure is in the journey.  I don’t have to wait until I get where I’m going (or even to 500,000 words) to enjoy the adventure of writing.  That started with word one.

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